I'll bet you all feel like just one more week passed but I feel like I've been away for a few years, spending time at summer camp for the first time ever XD I had a blast and kinda wish I was still there but at the same time I'm glad to be back at home and back in the blogosphere!!
TODAY I'm really happy to feature my great fren, Ivie Brooks, and her micro-fiction story based on Julia Ryan's poem "We Hold On Too Long".
I remember the time when both Ivie and I, newbie bloggers at the time, entered a short story contest and were both featured at the end. Boy, it was great fun. XD The This time it's me posting hers, and I gotta say, this one will make you FEEL things.
as if the dream was only meant to carry us so far, instead of us holding onto it forever.
- julia ryan @ twilight to dawn
- julia ryan @ twilight to dawn
My heart twisted. My breath came in sharp inhales and
shuddering exhales. Salty tears trailed down my face as I face the reality, the
truth, the revelation I had been avoiding for quite some time.
Everything I had
been holding onto, every hope I had crumbled like sawdust between my fingers.
It was my own fault. I had chosen this.
Follow your heart, they said. A dream
is something the heart wishes for.
As the teardrops fell into my lap, as my
mind sped through every mention I had ever made of my plans, my goals, what my
life would be like, I fell deeper into this bittersweet sense of calm and
frustration.
I had planned my life out from the moment the fateful question of
“What do you want to be when you grow up?” came out of the mouths of older kids
and teachers who were curious what their students daydreamed about.
My dreams
had been shattered, crumpled to the ground like bits of broken glass.
It wasn’t
anyone’s fault that my dreams had fallen through. I let my heart lead the way.
I knew better than that.
I stared up at the pools of moonlight on my ceiling,
my curtains swaying in the breeze of the ceiling fan, letting in the glowly
white light.
Why did it hurt to let go of something I knew wasn’t meant for me?
Was it because this whole time I was fooling myself into thinking it could be
for me, that it could work out?
I fell back, my head landing on my pillow, the
remaining tears running down the sides of my head, into my dark hair. I no
longer shook with sobs or cried out that it wasn’t fair. The heart doesn’t play
fair, something I learned long ago.
let's all applaud julia and ivie for these lovely pieces.
do you think ivie captured emotion very well?
cos i do. ^.^
smiles + sunshine,
lisa
This is so good! Tragic but beautiful.
ReplyDeleteYES IT IS! THANK YOU!
DeleteWOW. I HAVE NO WORDS. SO THIS WILL BE A VERY SHORT COMMENT. THAT WAS AMAZING, IVIE. JUST AMAZING.
ReplyDeleteAAAHHH THANKS FOR YOUR BEAUTIFUL COMMENT NICOLE <3
DeleteHOLY COOOOOOWWWWWWWWWWWWW IVIE. GOOD HEAVENS. THIS WAS BEAUTIFUL. <3 What a sweet, heartbreaking, beautiful story. I'm just going to rave forever now okay. XD
ReplyDeleteyes Elaikie you ABSOLUTELY SAID IT ;)
DeleteEEEEPP!!!
ReplyDeleteOh my WORD, THANK YOU!!
I had forgotten I had written this. When I saw my name, I was like, "Whaaa??"
I kind of made myself feel things, which is good, I think?
Thank you so much for featuring me! I remember entering that contest and both of us winning. That was a blast! I want to have a fiction contest at some point, too! It would be fun to see what people come up with.
Anyway, thanks again! I really appreciate you posting this! <3
IVIE!! I AM SO HAPPY YOU SENT THIS IN. and I love the memory of us being featured in the same contest. And I would love to enter any contest you host XDD
DeleteYOU ARE SO WELCOME AND THANK YOU FOR YOUR WORDS GIRL <333
Beautiful, Ivie. I love your descriptions and words. <3
ReplyDelete*nod nod*
DeleteOH MY IVIE!!!! This is great!! <3 <3 <3
ReplyDeleteYES ISN'T IT??!!
DeleteWow, so beautiful, love it. <3333
ReplyDeleteagreed, Gray. Totally ;D
Deletethis was okay but i do feel like more detail could have been added in a show-not-tell kind of way. keep sharing your work and getting critiques--it's how you grow as a writer!
ReplyDeleteCONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM!! THANKS so much for your comment. It's fantastic to get feedback on our writing, and yes - it's a huge part of growth and improvement! I'm sure Ivie appreciates it a lot!! :DD
Deletewow! Amazing. First I LOVE THE CONCEPT because I strongly believe we shouldn't follow our heart or our dreams, but our heart and dreams should follow God.
ReplyDeleteLove the line: I let my heart lead the way. I knew better than that.
And love the last line!
Amazing ;)
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THANKS SO MUCH KETURAH <3 I really gotta agree with you there that following our hearts isn't always the best thing we could do. I think Ivie really captured a splendid twist in this story ;D
DeleteThis is so sad but really strikes a chord. Really well done, Ivie!
ReplyDeleteHaha, on another note, I really wish I didn't have the memory of Dory so I could have remembered to enter the contest when it was open. XD Do you think you might do another one again sometime, Lisa?
YES! THANKS NICOLE!
DeleteAww it still makes me happy that you wanted to enter <3 it's okay though. I might do one again for my next blog anniversary cos this was such fun! Would you want me to do it again? If enough people would like it I might even do one sooner!
I would love it if you did another one! I hope you get enough interest! :D
DeleteOH WOW WWHATTT! I love this!
ReplyDeleteSimply Me