the micro-fiction contest [the winner + the story]

BET YOU ALL HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS FOR QUITE A WHILE. 

So have I. 

But in case you aren't up to date - my blogoversary was in June and in honor of that I hosted a contest. The rules were - a) the story must be inspried by a poem from Twilight to Dawn, and b) the story must be under 300 words. 

The winner would receive a lot of home-made gifs.

I am happy to announce that I got several entries, and while I am unfortunately unable to give out silver and bronze prizes to the runners-up, I shall be posting all the stories on my blog in the near future - and each story gets it's own individual post. That's my way of saying thank you to the contestants ;D They all deserve to be shared!





First of all, I'd like to THANK JULIA RYAN for being such a brilliant and inspring poet, and for allowing me to post her compositions on my blog as I share teh stories. You all should check out her blogs - she's such a beautiful inspiring human <3 


AND NOW WITHOUT FURTHER ADO, OUR WINNER IS ...

ZANE JONES. (pls go check out her amazing blog right here)


The inspiring poem:


P A I N  I N  L I F E

he was just a boy
but his father shoved him
into being
a man
the pace of the maturity
mixed between the yearning for love
stifled any and every
relationship he had
he tried to shrink back
hide in the shadows
look tough
to be tough
blocking out feelings wasn't enough
they had to disappear
he had to forget them
he didn't want to smile
just in case his armor
would crack
but the boy
who was forced to be a man
did smile
the armor did break
and that's when the true
him
sparkled through
but quickly
it would vanish
because i think
he was afraid
of being
hurt
yet again





The story:

I had a son once.
I had a dad once.
He was the best kid growing up.
He was never kind to me.
I drove him away.
I finally ran away.
He was only seventeen.
I was seventeen.
It was all my fault.
It was the right decision.
I loved him.
He hated me.
I never told him that.
When I was a kid, I wanted him to love me.
I wish I would have done things differently.
But it doesn't matter now.
He grew up too fast.
I learned to be tough.
I forced him to be a man.
At least I'm not a fool anymore.
He never got to be a boy.
I learned to hide my feelings -
After my wife died everything changed.
and I grieved on my own when my mom died.
I was so caught up in my own feelings I forgot his.
I don't want to be hurt again.
I miss her almost as much as I miss him.
I miss my mom still, but I try to forget about my dad.
All my riches mean nothing now.
I've hidden myself where he'll never find me.
Maybe, someday, things will be different.
Sometimes I wish things could have been different between us.
But right now they're not.
But they weren't.
And it was my
And it was his

fault.

It was a cold night. Two men walked the street alone, heads down. One of them was old and haggard, dressed in a business suit and warm overcoat. The other, a young man, wore ratty jeans and a long-sleeved t-shirt, and looked like he hadn't shaved for a few days.

They looked up at each other at the same moment.

"Dad," said the young one.

"Henry," said the old one.


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And I just want to say thank you to all of you who participated in my contest and linked to it on your blogs and all of you who will be reading - you mean so much to me and to the life of Inkwell XD

S T A Y   T U N E D   F O R   M O R E   S T O R I E S ;D

S P E A K   U P ,  M Y  D U D E S -

B R I N G   A L L   Y O U R   C O M M E N T S
  O N   T H I S  A R T  B Y   Z A N E   A N D  JU.

till next week.
xxxx
lisa

50 comments:

  1. ZANE!!! THIS STORY IS EPIC, I HOPE YOU SEE MY COMMENT, BECAUSE YOU NEED TO KNOW JUST HOW EPIC THIS STORY IS!!!! I NEED IT TO BE A BOOK NOW!!!

    OMW, this was AMAZING! Wow, my emotions are a jumbled mess. I can't wait to see all the other works of art when you publish them, Lisa. I LOVE THIS TALENTED COMMUNITY!! <3 <3 <3

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    1. THANK YOU SO MUCH IVIE! Can't wait till you get to read the rest of the stories too ;DD I love our community too!

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    2. Ivie, you are so sweet! I can't believe so many people loved it. This comment made my day. I don't know if it will ever be a book but it's so flattering that you think it could be! Lots of love!

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  2. Oh wow NO WAY.

    I saw this and clicked just because I was curious who won, like 100% sure it wasn't me. like I never expected to win at all. And I scrolled down and saw my name and like.... now I'm almost crying so yeah.

    Thank youuuu. This made my evening.

    Yeah I'll just go to bed with a big, goofy grin on my face...

    ❤️😊

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    1. ZAAAAAAANE! CONGRATULATIONS TO YOU! thanks a million to you for entering and making my day too with this lovely comment <333

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    2. P.S. Lisa, I just had to reply to all the sweet, wonderful comments - I hope you don't mind. <33

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  3. I LOVE ZANE'S POEM. <33 Also, Julia is such a queen, like her words are just on fire 24/7!!! >.<

    xoxo Abigail Lennah | Story-Eyed

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  4. WOW, Zane's story did things to my heart. AMAZING LIL WORK OF ART. <333

    I'm SO EXCITED to read the other stories too!!!

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    1. IT DID THINGS TO MY HEART TOO WHEN I FIRST READ IT AND I WAS LIKE, "YUP THIS IS A SUREFIRE WINNER!" Isn't it amazing how so much emotion is packed into so few words?

      THANKS LILA for your excitement <3

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  5. OH MY GOSH I LOVED THISSSSSS. Julia's poetry is always amazing, but pair that with the story and *hearteyes*

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  6. OH MY GOSH MY HEART. Zane you did such an amazing job and I am almost in tears at how beautiful and heart-wrenching that was. I love the symmetry and the way that you ended it was like - wait what oh my gosh that's perfect. You did an amazing job!

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    1. I COMPLETELY AGREE WITH YOUR TRUE! Couldn't have said it better myself ;D thank you for this and for reading and happy you enjoyed it!!

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    2. Wow this comment. :') You really liked it??? Thank you, True, it means a lot <33

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  7. Zane:

    THAT WAS AMAZING AND BEAUTIFUL AND WONDERFUL AND PERFECT AND I HAVE NO OTHER WORDS!!!!!!!!

    I can’t wait to see the other works, Lisa! This was an excellent idea!

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    1. SO HAPPY YOU ENJOY AND LIKE THE IDEA NICOLE (did you change your name on your profile ;D?) I COMPLETELY AGREE WITH ALL YOU SAID ABOUT ZANE'S WORK!!

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    2. WHAT. THIS COMMENT. UGH. I can't believe you're talking about my words that I wrote. :') THANK YOU NICOLE.

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  8. AHHHHHH CONGRATULATIONS ZANE!!!! It's really poignant and beautiful!

    Catherine

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  9. THAT STORY IS AMAZING!!!!! I loved every word of it!! Beautifully sad.

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    1. YES YES IT IS!! THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR LOVELY COMMENT. ZANE IS A GENIUS.

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    2. Thank you Julian <33

      And Lisa I'm afraid I'm not a genius but thank you nonetheless <3 :)

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  10. WOW, I LOVE THAT STORY SO MUCH!! GREAT JOB, ZANE!!!!

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  11. wow Zane, I am blown away. Lisa sent me the story beforehand but didn't mention the poem that you were inspired by, but I knew anyways. LITERALLY WAS FLOORED BY THIS! you did magical. you're amazing. wowowowowow

    THANK YOU FOR THIS <3

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    1. I WAS FLOORED TOO! YOU'RE NOT ALONE! I'm glad this little project of mine has your approval lol XD

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    2. JULIA THAT REALLY MEANS A LOT!! I can't believe you like it. I never expected all this. Thank you so much. :')

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  12. Congrats Zane!!! Your story is so sad and beautiful!
    <3

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  13. *jaw drops* THAT WAS AMAZING ZANE AND JULIA. I loved the poem, and then THAT STORY... Oh my word, I'm going to repeat myself again: That was amazing!

    Micaiah @ Notebooks and Novels

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    1. Super happy you liked them both Micaiah!! I agree with you completely ;D

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  14. Zane, this was great! I absolutely love how you told it from both views at the same time. Very meaningful! Congratulations on winning!

    Thank you Lisa for such a fun blog party!
    -Bri

    www.forget-not-his-benefits.blogspot.com

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    1. YOU ARE SO WELCOME BRI, and I'm so happy that you enjoyed it all <333

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  15. THAT POEM. THE STORY. I HAVE CHILLS. <3333 This was such a great idea! I've never seen anything like this before. BRB CRYING.

    xx Kenzie | www.paperpizzablog.com

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    1. YAS. AND YAS. Same my dude same <3 THANK YOU SO MUCH KENZIE :')

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  16. okay this one was amazing! the premise the poem-aaah! really nice.

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    1. HELLO AND THANK YOUUUU IMMENSELY. I am so happy you enjoyed. Also welcome to my blog <333

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